Shiro's Little Storytelling

[StrykerX]

=Shirogane And a little notice for StrykerX, do you have different idea of dark side character?

i put anakin there as a joke, but since u asked, I'll pm u if i get 1 figured out

[Marisa]

Loool at Blizt's name.

Nevick = Kevin

[Blizt]

Originally Posted by SakuyaIzayoi

Loool at Blizt's name.

Nevick = Kevin

fail@spellinghard, it's Nivek...if you can figure out it's the opposite spelling of Kevin, how can you fail lol
(and how did a "C" come out!?)

[Marisa]

Originally Posted by BliztForever

fail@spellinghard, it's Nivek...if you can figure out it's the opposite spelling of Kevin, how can you fail lol
(and how did a "C" come out!?)

Everyone laughs at my mispellings lol....

[Shirogane]

Chapter #5 is up fellas, thanks for waiting.

And, you can PM me for the idea for your original suit from now on. That is, if you wanna save the surprise that other reader will get when your suit appears.

So, happy reading guys. Hope you'll like it

[Blizt]

Erm...is it just me or that it feels that from now on every suit is gonna be "re-customized" or "build with many units' parts" o_O

It seems like a good idea at first for certain suit, but to this chapter it feels a bit over-doing it, like even that random bandit leader showed up also have a re-customized T3...

Also, despite the story is still good, it doesn't seem to be "a little fanfics base on SDGO" anymore too, more like "a little fanfics base on Gundam"

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Since you probably already thought about how your story is gonna be and certain setting is made, you can disregard the following opinions I have if you could care less :P
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Spoiler!

If you're writing a fanfic base on a game, you can write it tricky for instance turning some game features into the world of story, like some examples:

- Capsule
In this world, whatever pro pilot you are, you need to pay(or gamble) with the committee to get a mobile suit, which may result in getting useless, crappy, average, good, or hax suits.

- Various missions
Outside of Gundam Fight between people, there's other places on Earth that committee or normal people requesting for help from the mobile suit pilot, where you can write some of the mission in into an actual event that happens in your world. (SCREW the Gundam history timeline LOL)

- Various operator
Just like there's people trained to be ms pilot, there's also other who trained to be excellent operator, you can take their special abilities in game to make them into unique character into the story.

(For example, Operator that give more exp in game could be turned into a character with good combat knowledge that he/she gives good advice to pilot during battle, hence "increase the experience"

- Game Mode
Battleship battle, the 10 points limit in game could be turned to such situation:
A team of 4 may only able to send out 2 people/units fighting their enemy with 4 people/units, simply because their suit is more advance, while enemy's may be just average suits

Or Point Match battle, where more than 2 teams or maybe even hundred of units are all fighting a god damn war-like-battle, you could be killed right in the instant without knowing who the killer is, and they just keep coming

Death Match battle...where pilot signed up the battle knowing they could be killed, and the law here is killing is legit, anyone who tried to avenge fallen comrade will be chased down and persecute by law (blood-thirst or insane manic type of character can probably go here as they enjoy it XD)

- Mixing Plan
Well, you could take all those "re-customized" or "re-written OS" stuff here, and make up a few "made-up" Mix Plan, and the results are those fan-made Gundam/units we made up.



...I can't think of anything else by this point, and I think I have said enough

I just wanna say that by adding some (not all, hell no) of these may makes any reader that played this game (SDGO) feels like it's familiar, like they can place themselves into the story, an actual world

I'm sorry if this list of opinions offended you in any way, because as a writer too I know sometimes it can be frustrating that "reader is providing too many opinions" that I/you just wanna say "Why don't you just write your own damned novel then!?" lol (thing is, I am already tight on the novel I'm working on, so there's no way for me to get time to write a SDGO one )

[StrykerX]

nice job keep it up

[Shirogane]

Thank u very much BlitzForever that was true. Well, for now let just go along with the flow. I have a plan or two for that though. But, since everyone giving me their idea of their originals. It would be waste if I didn't include them in this story.

And I feel that I've been overdoing things a bit to far too, after I read again this chapter. But, well the change will have it own reason for next chapter onwards. Please bear with me for a little bit longer 'kay?

[Vartio]

Adding the whole customized units makes it feel more like a true Fanfic. let's face it, there's -never- been a single unique Gundam series without some new mech unless it's in early UC.

[Blizt]

Originally Posted by Vartio

Adding the whole customized units makes it feel more like a true Fanfic. let's face it, there's -never- been a single unique Gundam series without some new mech unless it's in early UC.

Yes having a few unique suits would be nice for a Gundam fanfic, but just like I said, this doesn't feel like a SDGO fanfic anymore cuz hardly any suit from the game is presented in the story (even if they are, mostly all "re-customized").

...And there isn't really anything related to the game other than the name of people lurk in this forum.

[Vartio]

Originally Posted by BliztForever

Yes having a few unique suits would be nice for a Gundam fanfic, but just like I said, this doesn't feel like a SDGO fanfic anymore cuz hardly any suit from the game is presented in the story (even if they are, mostly all "re-customized").

...And there isn't really anything related to the game other than the name of people lurk in this forum.

To be fair, the whole stat system is represented in like the Customized T3. You really think a T3 could move quicker with those same verniers? XD

[Shirogane]

Update for Chapter #6

Haaah ~~ it's up at last...
Took me ten days to completed it.... T T
This chapter will get many critics or complains for sure (I just know that when I write it...)
So, give me your opinions on this I'd appreciated it, and thank u very much for be with me in this fics until now.

Hontoni Domo Arigatou Gozaimasuta!!! Next chapter may take as long as this chapter, so, I'll ask you all to bear with me again.

[Ryuma]

loved reading it.
Shiro, you think you could give the s.freedom a solar reactor?

[FellowSharcar]

Originally Posted by Ryuma

loved reading it.
Shiro, you think you could give the s.freedom a solar reactor?

Just have to push it just a little more don't ya? lol

[FellowSharcar]

Just got finished reading...my gundams first appearance and my OS gets drained...plz tell me my unit isnt done for. I want to read when my machine going armor shedding and Quad Trans-AM in a fight and rips the enemy apart PS: He totally didnt steal my GN drives did he?

[StrykerX]

keep it up, awaiting chap 7

[FellowSharcar]

Originally Posted by StrykerX

keep it up, awaiting chap 7

totally am too

[FellowSharcar]

Hmm, Tempest specs are missing, Yay for double post

Gundam Tempest
Reactor: Quad GN Drives
Systems: Trans-Am, GN-Feild, Armor Shedding (similar to Needlah), X-Raiser attach Program, Quintinazation
Weapons:
2x GN Bazookas MK III
4x GN Beam vulcans (2 on head and 2 in chest)
2x Beam Sabers
2x Shoulder mounted Tempest Cannons (Like Virtues, single barrel firing a blue beam that splits in to 36 individual homing beams)
24x Fang MK III (Stored in backpack)
1x GN Mega Bazooka (combines both GN Bazookas, super high firepower)

And since the enemy stole the Quad GN Drive data, might as well put down an enemy.

Gundam Jehuty
Reactor: Quad GN Drives
Systems: Trans-Am, GN-Feild, Quintinazation.
Weapons:
2x MRBR (Multi-Role Beam Rifle, Sniper-Machine Gun-Rifle-Bazooka)
2x Beam Sabers
2x Beam leg blades (Knee to Toe beam blades)
2x GN Beam Vulcans
1x Hyper GN Bazooka (2 Shots, 2x the power and velocity of the GN Mega Bazooka)
36x Fang MK III (Stored in backpack)
GN-Feild Shockwave (Uses the GN-Feild and creates a shockwave equal to that created by Ryuma's S.F. and Tempest's weapons collideing.)

[meltyace]

Hmmm...
Nice chapter, but could you find a way for (you know who) to steal the freedoms data
and use it?
Oh and give it amuro's marking

[FellowSharcar]

Originally Posted by meltyace

Hmmm...
Nice chapter, but could you find a way for (you know who) to steal the freedoms data
and use it?
Oh and give it amuro's marking

Stealing the Quad-GN drive system wasnt enough was it lol

But a baby made of Ryuma's SF and my Tempest would be...wow thats retarded strong