Shiro's Little Storytelling

[Blizt]

btw shiro, your chapter 1's link is dead now, you might wanna fix it up for new viewer :O

[Retune]

Originally Posted by Vartio

...Indeed unless you're a Crossbone Unit, a Cross-shaped beam blade seems illogical, but depending what you're trying to do to a unit, mileage of a Cross-Shaped blade may vary...

Ahh. When I said that the Beamsabres were mounted in an X shape, I meant that there were 2 beam sabres, normal ones, that are stored on the gundam's back when not in use. When they are stored there it looks like an X.

I didn't mean to say that the sabres themselves were X shaped

[Shirogane]

Thank you BliztForever, i'll reupload it. and I'll add some bonus along.

And I will add my Special thanks for character that already appeared im my fics on #1 post

[Retune]

I just looked through your character drawings..

I Envy You.

[Marisa]

Nice drawings! ;o

Way better then mine!

;~;

Can't wait for the new chapter too.

[FellowSharcar]

Those drawing are fantastic! And very nice stories!

[StrykerX]

nice drawings, your quite an artiste, you know that? dam i wish i could draw like you

[meltyace]

Wow nice drawings, though they look familiar to some people....
Anyway, keep up the nice work!

[Blizt]

*knock, knock*

Hello is the writer still continuing the story? :/
It seems at least 2 weeks or more have passed since last update...

[Shirogane]

Sorry about the long delay. Just come back from business trip.

uploaded Chapter 4

Note: Here, as promised Vartio. you got the main spotlight in this chapter

[meltyace]

Your ryuma sketch looks like sanger zolvot....
EDIT: sorry if i can't get time to edit your grammar, but i need to edit quite a portio of it so
it may be up tomorow, since i have some free time from my inactivicty
Btw, TRANS AM makes the suit 3 times faster, not 10 times....

[Gundam00Raiser]

Originally Posted by meltyace

Your ryuma sketch looks like sanger zolvot....
EDIT: sorry if i can't get time to edit your grammar, but i need to edit quite a portio of it so
it may be up tomorow, since i have some free time from my inactivicty
Btw, TRANS AM makes the suit 3 times faster, not 10 times....

who told u that?

[Vartio]

It's a known fact. The Trans-Am is a GIANT homage to Char. What with turning a Suit RED, and making it run 3x better. The latter stated in the S1.

And I like how Katoma came out. His personality was a bit spot on with the original "Gundam WarZone" Katoma that utilized the STN-J. Eccentric, and quirky. I am a bit shocked you technically gave him the Win vs Trans-Am though, he would have normally lost versus Superior speed.

I also like your own tweaks to the STN-J (I don't mind either, it is meant to be a patchwork suit with a huge degree of flexibility to the design), although I saw that not all of them came into play, which seems to insinuate that you'll be returning the characters later on (I specifically note you didn't have him use the Shoulder Machine Cannons, Beam Tomahawk, or even the other =6= Heat Chains, and since you made him lose the Nu-Gundam right arm, if he does return that will end up being replaced, and I wonder just how you'll improve the STN-J (since you got good taste, if you plan to have him return I'll give you that freedom to what else 'new' is added to the STN-J's body. I really kept the AU to an absolute minimum so I think you'd be able to figure out what to use a lot better)

Honestly though, I was half expecting you to use Katoma's Re-GZ versus that Zno, but throwing STN-J only seemed Overkill haha. You completely surprised me with every turn and I congratulate you for that.

[Kisaragi]

Originally Posted by Gundam00Raiser

who told u that?

It was stated in the series itself, when Transam was first introduced.

[Gundam00Raiser]

Originally Posted by Accent

It was stated in the series itself, when Transam was first introduced.

it doesn't look like that in the 00 animation, but ill double check if they say so, from original source not from a fansub

[StrykerX]

nice 3rd chapter, grammer errors still there, but what the hell, its dam good

[Retune]

Originally Posted by StrykerX

nice 3rd chapter, grammer errors still there, but what the hell, its dam good

I like Shiro's ability to throw events, encounters and situations at you that you wouldn't expect.

Gotta do something about the grammatical errors tho ima Grammar Nazi.

[FellowSharcar]

Is it too late to type out character profiles for the stories to come?

[Shirogane]

Actually, I need some more characters here.

Preferably the one that fits an 'Outlaws' type. Because....

Umm... = =a

....Let just say, I'll need them in my future chapters. So, feel free to add your character. And your personal suit is nice too as well as your character background.

And I am kinda short of enemy character now. So far, there is only one person that seems fits to be 'True Evil' character.

So, I would be nice if you can add the 'Dark Side' too

[Kisaragi]

Since you need an outlaw...


Name: Valentin Schneizer

Unit: Blood Tallgeese (Which is basically a customized Tallgeese 3)

Age: 35

Description : A grizzled pirate of the sea of stars, strikes fear into spacefarers. Despite being a pilot of his own "Blood Tallgeese", he is also the captain of his flagship, the Arcadia. His band of pirates are under the oath to fight for what they believe. As an outlaw of the stars, he fights like a true pirate, against the law. The sea of stars... is his sea.

He has no special abilities being a normal human. However, after long years as a pilot, he has enhanced sense of piloting.

MS Specials: His Blood Tallgeese is just that: A customized Tallgeese 3. It has been reinforced heavily.

Alignment: Chaotic Neutral