Kyo. U can draw and colored at this stage consider talented as an amateur.
To done with a good finishing u may require a better software or courses.
To me that not an unfinished job.
Let look at this, a 5 years old child can spot a problem or make comment.
The point is can he fix it? Or do he has a better solution?
Since Reinshiki can comment the drawing and even got a better idea to make it nicer. How about Reinshiki show us ur touched up work and may help Kyo to improve his artwork.